小学五年级英语作文范文及点评【三篇】

【第一篇：I can help do housework】

I am a girl. My name is Li Ling. I’m in Class Three, Grade Five. I’m helpful at home. I can water the flowers, empty the trash and sweep the floor. After meals, I can help my mother do the dishes. On Sunday, I can wash the clothes. What about you? Are you helpful, too?

　　【要领点评】

　　本篇作文的题目是“我可以帮助做家务”，作者主要叙述自己在家帮助做的事情，介绍自己的名字，所在年级及在家能做的家务，很详细，到位。

　　小朋友们在写作时，应尽量写一些亲自经历的事情，这样会避免在作文时显得太空，因为只有自己经常做的事情印象才会特别深刻。写作时还要注意大小写和时态。

【第二篇：My Favourite Food】

Do you know what this is? Guess! Its colour is yellow. It’s long and thin. It looks like a small boat and crescent. Oh, it is a banana. Do you know what that is? Guess again! Its colour is orange. It’s round. It looks like a small ball and a small lantern. Oh, it is an orange. I like then a lot. I like ice-creams. I like to chew gum. Chocolates and candies are yummy. I like them very much.

　　How about you? What’s your favourite food?

　　【要领点评】

　　My Favourite Food 是一篇很成功的文章，小作者并不是简单地列举出自己喜欢的每一种食物，而是有详有略地进行介绍。整篇文章用词准确、语言流畅、没有语法错误。另外，文章中出现了一些生词，可见小作者是用心查字典了。

【第三篇：My weekend】

There are two days on the weekend, Saturday and Sunday. On Saturday, I often go to my dancing class in the morning and do my homework in the afternoon, and I often help my mother do some cleaning. On Sunday, I always visit my grandparents in the morning and do some reading in the afternoon. After dinner, I often watch TV with my parents. At that time, we can talk with each other and say something happily. We often have a good time.

　　【要领点评】

　　写法：这篇习作是按照时间顺序记叙周末的活动，记叙了周六和周日的上午和下午分别做了哪些活动及对活动的感受。

　　即：周六上午：舞蹈课→下午：做作业和帮妈妈做清洁→周日上午：看望祖父母→下午：阅读→晚上：看电视，与父母交流→感受：高兴和愉快。

　　我们还可以选取周六和周日中的几个比较主要的活动来写，先说明什么时间在什么地方由什么人做了什么事，有什么感受。再按照活动顺序把活动内容写清楚，后抒发一下对这次活动或这个周末的感想。

　　时态：这篇短文我们可以用三种时态来写: a.一般过去时(主要描述你上个周末是怎样度过的);b.一般现在时(主要描述你经常怎样度过周末);c.一般将来时(主要描述你要怎样过周末)。这里我们来表述平时是如何过周末的，所以采用一般现在时来写。

　　注意：活动的相关表达方法可采用旧知识，eg.(例)起床get up，和新知识，eg. Climb mountains去爬山中的un很容易错写成nu。还要注意不要出现病句，eg. “I often watch TV with my parents.”不要写成 “I often with my parents watch TV .” 词量上控制在50 ~ 80 之间。