考生必看：托福写作锻造地道英语句子(上)1

改进：Artists' work upgrades our civilization.

2. For example, you work in a big factory.

改进: Suppose you work in a big factory.

3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main

job.

改进：You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make

it your career.

4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.

改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.

5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level.

改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life.

6. Their brain is still very young.

改进: They are still immature.

7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.

改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.